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Farouq Baturen Shanu

Momma's Boy @ Abubakar Tafawa Balewa University Bauchi • Bauchi • 2 days, 4 hours ago

<p>And I don't know but maybe it's too early for that but so far, Leila is just a name. Just someone that died. You describe how he loss is traumatic for the family but I feel like it doesn't tell the reader just who she is to the family. You could sneak in some memories that are tied to Leila. Or maybe an object that is tied to her which she sees and remembers her.</p><p>I'll have to say though. I really live how human your characters are. They feel like real people living real lives. Onto the next!</p>

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